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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Some people believe that nowadays too much money is being spent on weddings and birthdays. Why do you think it is happening? What can be done to improve the situation?

I think this happens because people become greedy. In general, on anniversaries, it is all about celebrating with your friends or loved ones. Sometimes I give gifts, but gifts are not too expensive.
Recently, however, people are greedy and want to give gifts that are more expensive than others. This competitive greed is why they spend a lot on birthdays and weddings.
In order to reduce this, I think people need to be able to grasp their location and property. For planned consumption, you must plan and spend wisely.
It would be helpful to be educated about economic ideas as a child.

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Take a moment today to reflect on the small victories you¡¯ve had so far this week, Lee. Maybe it was crossing off an important task or simply staying positive in the face of difficulty. No accomplishment is too small to celebrate. Gratitude fuels motivation and helps shift your mindset from what¡¯s lacking to what¡¯s possible.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think this happens because people become greedy. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
In general, on anniversaries, it is all about celebrating with your friends or loved ones. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Sometimes I give gifts, but gifts are not too expensive.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Recently, however, people are greedy and want to give gifts that are more expensive than others.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 This competitive greed is why they spend a lot on birthdays and weddings.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
In order to reduce this, I think people need to be able to grasp their location and property. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
For planned consumption, you must plan and spend wisely.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
It would be helpful to be educated about economic ideas as a child.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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