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What are the advantages and disadvantages of having many cousins?

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First, advantages is more people play with me and disadvantages is loud, annoying and they are touch my things so could be breaking my things.

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First, advantages is more people play with me and disadvantages is loud, annoying and 
they are touch my things so could be breaking my things.
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