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What are the advantages and disadvantages of having many cousins?

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First, advantages is more people play with me and disadvantages is loud, annoying and they are touch my things so could be breaking my things.

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                    What are the advantages and disadvantages of having many cousins?


First, advantages is more people play with me and disadvantages is loud, annoying and 
they are touch my things so could be breaking my things.
>> One advantage is that I have more people to play with, whereas some advantages are, that they are loud, annoying, and touch or even break my things. 

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