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I know that eating too much salt isn¡¯t good for people¡¯s health.
But, I think eating the right amount of salt not only makes me feel better than never eating salt, but also requires it from my body.
Therefore, people has to eat the right amount of salt.

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Hi Kara, 

Our body need salt, that's for sure. 
But then again, everything should be in moderation. :) 

Andrea 

I know that eating too much salt isn¡¯t good for people¡¯s health.
>> Correct 

But, I think eating the right amount of salt not only makes me feel better than never eating salt, but also requires it from my body.
>> But I think eating the right amount of salt not only makes me feel better than never eating salt, but our body requires it. 

Therefore, people has to eat the right amount of salt.
>> Therefore, people have to eat the right amount of salt.
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