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I think I have knowledge of the current case.
This is because the media and means to access information and knowledge have expanded.
In the past, information and knowledge were obtained through books, newspapers, radio, and TV, but these days, you can search the Internet through your phone and use AI, so you can get information and knowledge more widely and quickly.

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I think I have knowledge of the current case.
This is because the media and means to access information and knowledge have expanded.
In the past, information and knowledge were obtained through books, newspapers, radio, and TV, but these days, you can search the Internet through your phone and use AI, so you can get information and knowledge more widely and quickly.

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>> Or: I believe I am knowledgeable about the current case. This is because access to information and knowledge has greatly expanded with advancements in media and technology. In the past, people obtained information and knowledge through books, newspapers, radio, and TV. However, nowadays, you can search the Internet on your phone and even use AI, allowing you to access information and knowledge more widely and quickly.
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