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What is the greatest lesson you have learned from a book or a movie?

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I learned the importance of moral standard in simple day by watching a movie which is shown the story of Shohei Othani who plays baseball in LA Dodgers.
He picks up trashes as soon as realizes them on the street.
He believes that he gathers other's luck, although someone can comprehend them just a trash.
His teach makes me pick up trashes on the street and I become to think in terms of my luck.

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Hi Seung Min!
Thank you for your effort today.
I can see form your writing that you need to widen your vocabulary.
You have basic knowledge of sentence structure and that's a good start.
Now, we just need to make sure that you are familiar with the right terms for the right ideas.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I learned the importance of moral standard in simple day by watching a movie which is shown the story of Shohei Othani who plays baseball in LA Dodgers.
>> I learned the importance of moral standards on a simple day when watching a movie which showed the story of Shohei Othani who plays baseball for the LA Dodgers.
He picks up trashes as soon as realizes them on the street.
>> He picks up trash when he sees it on the street.
He believes that he gathers other's luck, although someone can comprehend them just a trash.
>> He believes that by doing so, he can gather others' luck while some people would just see it as trash.
His teach makes me pick up trashes on the street and I become to think in terms of my luck.
>> His philosophy encourages me to pick up trash on the street which I now think of as luck. 
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