¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

What do you think of plastic surgery?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÇÑ*¿¬
2025-02-18 1104

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

I think that plastic surgery is a self-fulfillng way.
It is one of the girl's desires to make herself pretty.
So it is good for to enhance their self-fulfillment.
But, the excessive plastic surgery is dangerous for them.
It can effect their health badly. It can also make your face be unsatisfied.
So, before we try to do plastic surgery, we should consider it one more time.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello Nicole!
This was very nice to ready. I think you are very insightful! Thank you for your time and effort to write this. See you on Thursday! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

I think that plastic surgery is a self-fulfillng way.
>>I think that plastic surgery is a way of self-fulfillment.
It is one of the girl's desires to make herself pretty.
>>It is one of a girl's desires to make herself pretty.
So it is good for to enhance their self-fulfillment.
>>So, it is good for enhancing their self-fulfillment.
But, the excessive plastic surgery is dangerous for them.
>>However, excessive plastic surgery is dangerous for them.
It can effect their health badly. It can also make your face be unsatisfied.
>>It can affect their health badly and may also lead to dissatisfaction with their appearance.
So, before we try to do plastic surgery, we should consider it one more time.
>>So, before undergoing plastic surgery, we should consider it carefully.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
142440 Do you enjoy spending time alone, or do you prefer to be around... ¼Û*ÀÚ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 2
142439 Homework ¿À*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1767
142438 Homework & Question ÀÌ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1507
142437 What¡¯s the most fun exercise you¡¯ve ever tried? ÀÌ*Å ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1530
142436 How do you feel when people say something negative about you? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1396
142435 Which is better for communication, e-mail or handwritten letters? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1282
142434 What is your source of happiness these days? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1203
142433 Homework ÀÌ*¼÷ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1398
142432 Does it need to go to school before the age of seven? ÇÑ*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1393
142431 Which is more difficult : to apologize or forgive someone who... ÃÖ*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1511
142430 What kind of exercise do you enjoy the most? ³ë*ö ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1176
142429 What¡¯s your dream offer that would make you drop everything and... ÀÓ*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1248
142428 What\'s the best way to kill time among your age group? Â÷*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1322
142427 Do you think another global pandemic is likely in your lifetime? ±Ç*Áø ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1
142426 Talk about the most shocking historical fact that you\'ve... ¹Ú*È£ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1401
142425 Korean ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 0
142424 What is the most effective way to make yourself motivated every... ÃÖ*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1240
142423 2/10 Homework ±Ç*ºó ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1
142422 Homework1 ±è* ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1345
142421 Homework ±è*´Ô ¿Ï·á 2025-02-11 1243

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04