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What do you think of plastic surgery?

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I think that plastic surgery is a self-fulfillng way.
It is one of the girl's desires to make herself pretty.
So it is good for to enhance their self-fulfillment.
But, the excessive plastic surgery is dangerous for them.
It can effect their health badly. It can also make your face be unsatisfied.
So, before we try to do plastic surgery, we should consider it one more time.

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Hello Nicole!
This was very nice to ready. I think you are very insightful! Thank you for your time and effort to write this. See you on Thursday! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

I think that plastic surgery is a self-fulfillng way.
>>I think that plastic surgery is a way of self-fulfillment.
It is one of the girl's desires to make herself pretty.
>>It is one of a girl's desires to make herself pretty.
So it is good for to enhance their self-fulfillment.
>>So, it is good for enhancing their self-fulfillment.
But, the excessive plastic surgery is dangerous for them.
>>However, excessive plastic surgery is dangerous for them.
It can effect their health badly. It can also make your face be unsatisfied.
>>It can affect their health badly and may also lead to dissatisfaction with their appearance.
So, before we try to do plastic surgery, we should consider it one more time.
>>So, before undergoing plastic surgery, we should consider it carefully.
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