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What do you think are the disadvantages of living in another city?

>>> First, missing my parents and friends a lot. I think it is quite important that someone familiar is next to me wherever I'm in. family and best friend are irreplaceable people.
Second, missing my hometown's popular foods. Eating itself is considered of the most important thing in living these days. It can give us a energy when we just eat the hometown food
or mom's food remembering the memory.

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Hi, Jun!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. You really did well! :)
~ T. Camille


What do you think are the disadvantages of living in another city?

First, missing my parents and friends a lot. 
>> First, missing my parents and friends a lot is one disadvantage
I think it is quite important that someone familiar is next to me wherever I'm in. 
>> CORRECT!
Family and best friend are irreplaceable people.
>> CORRECT!
Second, missing my hometown's popular foods. 
>> Second, missing my hometown's popular foods is another disadvantage. 
Eating itself is considered of the most important thing in living these days. 
>> Eating itself is considered one of the most important things in living these days. 
It can give us a energy when we just eat the hometown food or mom's food remembering the memory.
>> 
It can give us energy when we just eat the hometown food or mom's food remembering the memory.

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