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I think my best friend needs to have same code of humor. We can talk about any topic for a long time. And both of us can feel comfortable and funny. I often feel shy when I meet awkward people. So I try to talk with them excessively to break up awkward mood. Then I feel tired quickly. But when I met my best friend, I was very comfortable not to do something. Frequency of meeting is important to make a best friend. I can feel awkward to her who was my best friend if we haven't met for a long time. Because if we haven't met for a long time, then we don't have something in common.

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I think my best friend needs to have same code of humor.
>>I think my best friend needs to have the same code of humor.
 We can talk about any topic for a long time. 
>>correct
And both of us can feel comfortable and funny. 
>>correct
I often feel shy when I meet awkward people. 
>>correct
So I try to talk with them excessively to break up awkward mood. 
>>So I try to talk with them excessively to break the awkward mood. 
Then I feel tired quickly. 
>>correct
But when I met my best friend, I was very comfortable not to do something. 
>>But when I meet my best friend, I feel very comfortable doing the things I want to do.
Frequency of meeting is important to make a best friend. 
>>The frequency of meetings is important to make a best friend. 
I can feel awkward to her who was my best friend if we haven't met for a long time.
>>I will feel awkward toward a friend with whom I haven't been with for a long time.
 Because if we haven't met for a long time, then we don't have something in common.
>>correct
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