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If you could wish for a wedding gift from a friend, what would it be and why?

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Thank you for suggesting the interesting subject!

There are so many things I want to wish for wedding gifts to my friends.

First of all, I want to get a robot vacuum cleaner. I saw some articles represent benefits of robot vacuum cleaner.
It makes me convenient after leaving the work, and it always protects my house from dirt.
I think anyone who earn money by working, love a robot vacuum cleaner.

Second, I expect to get an all-in-one washing machine.
In korea, Samsung introduce brand new washing machine which can wash and dry in once.
It is a very fascinating home appliance I have seen!
Because I have to move my laundry to dryer after washing.
This is a very tired house chore, I think.
There isn't any name of that machine, but I called it an all-in-one washing machine.

There are so many things I want to get when I marry.
But those two machines are my most machine that want to get!

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Hello Lee!
Sorry for checking your written homework late.
It is nice if we can freely express our thoughts to our friends, especially on this matter. Real friends would understand if you would consider doing this in the future. Of course, I am not encouraging you because we have different cultures. In our case, one friend suggested and all of us agreed on it. Like what I have told you, it was a win-win situation.
See you in class!
Aki~


Thank you for suggesting the interesting subject!
>>> CORRECT!

There are so many things I want to wish for wedding gifts to my friends.
>>> There are so many things I want to wish for wedding gifts from my friends.

First of all, I want to get a robot vacuum cleaner. I saw some articles represent benefits of robot vacuum cleaner.
>>> First of all, I want to get a robot vacuum cleaner. I saw some articles represent the benefits of a robot vacuum cleaner.

It makes me convenient after leaving the work, and it always protects my house from dirt.
>>> CORRECT!

I think anyone who earn money by working, love a robot vacuum cleaner.
>>> I think anyone who earns money would love a robot vacuum cleaner.

Second, I expect to get an all-in-one washing machine.
>>> CORRECT!

In korea, Samsung introduce brand new washing machine which can wash and dry in once.
>>>  In Korea, Samsung introduces a brand new washing machine that can wash and dry in one go.

It is a very fascinating home appliance I have seen!
>>> CORRECT!

Because I have to move my laundry to dryer after washing.
>>> Because I have to move my laundry to the dryer after washing.

This is a very tired house chore, I think.
>>> CORRECT!

There isn't any name of that machine, but I called it an all-in-one washing machine.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >> In the UK,  they call it a washer-dryer

There are so many things I want to get when I marry.
>>>  There are so many things I want to get when I get married.

But those two machines are my most machine that want to get!
>>> But those two machines are my most machines thatI  want to get!
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