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Q : Do you often spend weekends with family or friends? Why or why not?

A : Yes. I usually spend weekends with my family or friends.
Since i would be exhausted after working from Monday to Friday, spending weekends with family or friends is healing for me.
This weekend, i will spend my time with my family because 7th March is my birthday.
So, i will go my hometown and eat delicious foods, and spend this weekend with my family.

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Hello Eddy!

You're doing an amazing job with your writing! I can see that you're putting in a lot of effort, and it's really paying off. Your answer is clear, personal, and heartfelt, which makes it interesting to read!

And wow, your birthday is coming soon! Happy early birthday! I hope you have a fantastic time celebrating with your family and eating delicious food! What¡¯s your favorite birthday meal?

I also love how you explained that weekends with family and friends help you recover from a busy week. That¡¯s so relatable! If you want to make your answer even better, you could add a little more detail about what makes spending time with them special. Maybe you have a favorite thing to do together? Or a fun memory from a past birthday?

But overall, you¡¯re doing so well, and I love seeing your improvement! Keep up the great work, and enjoy your birthday weekend!

~Teacher Cathy

 

Yes. I usually spend weekends with my family or friends.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Yes, I usually spend my weekends with family or friends.

Since i would be exhausted after working from Monday to Friday, spending weekends with family or friends is healing for me.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Since I get exhausted from working Monday to Friday, spending weekends with family or friends feels refreshing for me.

This weekend, i will spend my time with my family because 7th March is my birthday.

>>CORRECT

OR>>This weekend, I will spend time with my family because March 7th is my birthday.

So, i will go my hometown and eat delicious foods, and spend this weekend with my family.

>>So, I will go to my hometown, eat delicious food, and spend this weekend with my family.

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