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Are fast food franchises popular in your country? Explain.

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Yes, because the fast food franchise is most people like so popular in my country for example KFC, MC Donald's and Starbucks.

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Yes because the fast food franchise is most people like so popular in my country for example KFC, MC Donald's and Starbucks.
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