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I think most of the people want to keep their own aspirations such as harmonious and peaceful family, energetic friends, kind colleagues.Or also there are different kind of them. It is like desire for honor, an interest that makes their own heart beat, desire for strong power or money.
I felt it yesterday and today on my way to work. People are commuting with expressionless faces but I know it's for them to live hard.

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I think most of the people want to keep their own aspirations such as harmonious and peaceful family, energetic friends, kind colleagues.Or also there are different kind of them. 
>> I think most people want to keep their own aspirations such as a harmonious and peaceful family, energetic friends, kind colleagues or there might be different kinds of them. 
It is like desire for honor, an interest that makes their own heart beat, desire for strong power or money.
>> It is like a desire for honor, an interest that makes their own heart beat, and desire for strong power or money.
I felt it yesterday and today on my way to work. 
People are commuting with expressionless faces, but I know it's for them to live hard.
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