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Of all the places you\'ve visited while traveling which one would you recommend to your friends ?

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I have visited many countries.
Most of the time I went with friends or coworkers, but twice I went with my family.
One was to Japan and the other was to the United States
Each country had its own unique attractions.
But I never forget my trip to the United States with my family in 2008.
At that time, my family traveled all over the U.S for almost a month
So of the many countries, I would recommend you visit the United States.
The United States is the richest and the most powerful country in the world and has world-class cities like New York and LA, and has a lot to see like Disney World and the Grand Canyon.
The most memorable thing is that Korea and the Philippines have one time zone, but the United States has four time zones.
I experienced the time zone change when I drove from the eastern part of the United States to the western part.
It was a really amazing experience.
I hope you experience it too.

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Hi, Soon Ho^^
Thank you for sharing.
Having different time zones is fascinating. 
_T. SHAY^^
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I have visited many countries.
>>Correct
OR: I have been to many countries.

Most of the time I went with friends or coworkers, but twice I went with my family.
>>I went on most trips with my friends and co-workers, but I went on a trip twice with my family.
One was to Japan and the other was to the United States
>>One was to Japan and the other was to the United States.
OR: The first one was a trip to Japan, and the other one was a trip to the U.S.

Each country had its own unique attractions.
>>Each country has its own unique attractions.
But I never forget my trip to the United States with my family in 2008.
>>But I'll never forget my trip to the United States with my family in 2008.
At that time, my family traveled all over the U.S for almost a month
>>Correct
OR: At that time, we travelled all over the U.S. for almost a month.

So of the many countries, I would recommend you visit the United States.
>>So, out of the many countries I visited, I would recommend the United States.
The United States is the richest and the most powerful country in the world and has world-class cities like New York and LA, and has a lot to see like Disney World and the Grand Canyon.
>>Correct
OR: The United States is the richest and most powerful country in the world with world-class cities like New York and LA and with many popular tourist attractions like Disney World and Grand Canyon.
The most memorable thing is that Korea and the Philippines have one time zone, but the United States has four time zones.
>>Correct
OR: What makes it different from other countries is that while Korea and the Philippines has only one time zone, the United States actually has four time zones.

I experienced the time zone change when I drove from the eastern part of the United States to the western part.
>>Correct
OR: I experienced the change in time zone while traveling from one state to another. 

It was a really amazing experience.
>>Correct
OR: It was awesome.

I hope you experience it too.
>>Correct
OR: I hope you have the chance to experience it too.
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