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Q : Have you ever felt like you were burning the candle at both ends? What caused it? Describe your experience and how you managed the situation.

A : Yes i did. In early last year, i took a work of retired worker suddenly.
Since i wasn`t have many experiences and task skills, i worked really hard.
I went the office 1 hour early and did overtime work 2 hours everyday.
After a month, i felt that i was burning.
So, i told to my manager i can`t resist that situation anymore.
After hours of counsel, i can unburden some works.
And as time goes by, i can deal with more work. So, i was burdened it again.

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Hi Eddy!

Your answer is great because it clearly describes your experience and how you handled the pressure. You did a good job explaining what caused your stress and how you worked through it. I can see that you are a hardworking and responsible person!

To make your response even better, consider adding more details:

How did you feel during that time? You mentioned feeling "burned out," but what were the specific signs? Were you physically exhausted, mentally drained, or both?

What helped you manage the stress? Besides talking to your manager, did you try any personal strategies, like taking breaks, exercising, or getting support from coworkers or family?

What did you learn from this experience? Now that you have been through this, do you approach work differently to avoid burnout?

You're doing a great job expressing your thoughts! Keep practicing, and you'll continue improving your writing.

 ~Teacher Cathy

Yes i did. In early last year, i took a work of retired worker suddenly.

>>Yes, I did. Early last year, I suddenly took over the work of a retired employee.

Since i wasn`t have many experiences and task skills, i worked really hard.

>>Since I didn¡¯t have much experience or many job-related skills, I worked really hard.

I went the office 1 hour early and did overtime work 2 hours everyday.

>>I arrived at the office an hour early and worked two hours of overtime every day.

After a month, i felt that i was burning.

>>After a month, I felt completely burned out.

So, i told to my manager i can`t resist that situation anymore.

>>So, I told my manager that I couldn¡¯t handle the situation anymore.

After hours of counsel, i can unburden some works.

>>After hours of counseling, I was able to delegate some of my tasks.

And as time goes by, i can deal with more work.

>>CORRECT

OR>>As time passed, I became capable of handling more work.

So, i was burdened it again.

>>So, I was burdened with those tasks again.

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