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How technology has Improved our lifestyle

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2025-03-10 564

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I think the technology has brought us to the better life style.
First, we can call to someone just find the name in the phone.
It can reduced possibility that dial the wrong number.
And we ignore the number what we don't know(like a spam call).
That's why I think the technology has developed our life style more convenient.

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Hello there, Theo! 

I agree that technology has definitely improved our lifestyle, especially when it comes to communication. Being able to quickly find contacts and avoid spam calls is really helpful. However, I also think that relying too much on technology can sometimes make people less attentive. For example, some people forget phone numbers easily because they rely on their devices.

- Kristine ^^ 

 I think the technology has brought us to the better life style.
>> I think technology has brought us a better lifestyle.
First, we can call to someone just find the name in the phone.
>> First, we can call someone just by finding their name in the phone.
It can reduced possibility that dial the wrong number.
>> It can reduce the possibility of dialing the wrong number.
And we ignore the number what we don't know(like a spam call).
>> And we can ignore numbers we don't recognize, like spam calls.
That's why I think the technology has developed our life style more convenient.
>> That's why I think technology has made our lifestyle more convenient.
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