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How would you describe the population of your country?

My country population is about 50 million people living it.
The majority of people in Downtown area.
Nowdays, Population is steadily decrease.
Cause economic environment is not good.

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Hello Chris,

I do believe that you are determined to enhance your abilities in English.

There were some mistakes but don't let those mistakes conquer your strength.

I hope that you will still continue to develop this way.

You can learn from this process.

See yourself as a person who will be successful. So don't pull yourself down I know you can do it! 
 ^.^ Just keep it up!!

T. Jeny


How would you describe the population of your country?

My country population is about 50 million people living it.
>>My country's population is about 50 million.
The majority of people in Downtown area.
>>The majority of the people are living in the Downtown area.
Nowdays, Population is steadily decrease.
>>Nowadays, the population is steadily decreasing.
Cause economic environment is not good.
>>Cause the economic environment is not good.
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