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Have you ever made any lifestyle changes to improve your health?

작성자: 노*철
2025-03-12 773

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I have tried many things to change my lifestyle to improve my health.
There are some changes that have succeeded and others that have failed.
But regardless of whether I failed or succeeded, I think it's a good attempt just to constantly think about change.
In fact, there are far more failed attempts.
I spent a lot of time sitting while working, so I bought a small table for standing while working, but I did it for only a few days.
I bought a lot of vegetables and fruits to improve my diet, but I couldn't eat all them and threw them away.
I tried to get enough sleep but woke up early regardless of my will.
But I think it was a good thing to make my routine after work to improve my health.
If there is a problem, I don't eat dinner for exercise, so I have to eat irregular dinner.
I think I need to find out if there is a good way.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello David. You expressed your thoughts clearly and effectively. I made a few adjustments to improve clarity, sentence flow, and natural phrasing. Your writing shows strong organization and a good grasp of structure. Keep up the great work! 

~ T. Lia

I have tried many things to change my lifestyle to improve my health.
>> CORRECT

There are some changes that have succeeded and others that have failed.
>> Some changes have been successful, while others have not.

But regardless of whether I failed or succeeded, I think it's a good attempt just to constantly think about change.
>> But regardless of whether I succeed or fail, I believe it's valuable just to keep thinking about change.

In fact, there are far more failed attempts.
>> In fact, I have had far more failed attempts.

I spent a lot of time sitting while working, so I bought a small table for standing while working, but I did it for only a few days.
>> Since I spent a lot of time sitting while working, I bought a small standing desk, but I only used it for a few days.

I bought a lot of vegetables and fruits to improve my diet, but I couldn't eat all them and threw them away.
>> I bought a lot of vegetables and fruits to improve my diet, but I couldn’t eat them all and ended up throwing some away.

I tried to get enough sleep but woke up early regardless of my will.
>> I tried to get enough sleep, but I woke up early despite my efforts.

But I think it was a good thing to make my routine after work to improve my health.
>> However, I think establishing a post-work routine to improve my health was a good decision.

If there is a problem, I don't eat dinner for exercise, so I have to eat irregular dinner.
>> The only problem is that I skip dinner for exercise, which leads to an irregular eating schedule.

I think I need to find out if there is a good way.
>> I think I need to find a better approach.
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