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People have a desire that about being recognized.

Nowdays, We have living that looking into the other People of far away that due to develope of Social Network Service.

In the current of times

In the current of times, In spite of the fact that there is no problem myself

People are feeling that a relative sense of deprivation and a sense of inferiority that Looking at other people's lives.

People overspend in order to relieve that emotions.

Buying a good car and good clothes, ect items is not problem If you can afford your situation.

But I think overspending to show off my situation is prblematic even though I can't afford it.

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Hi there Joseph! Thanks for diligently doing your essay. I appreciate your effort. Keep it up!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
People have a desire that about being recognized.
>>> 
People have a natural desire to be recognized.
Nowdays, We have living that looking into the other People of far away that due to develope of Social Network Service.
>>> 
Nowadays, we live in a world where we constantly observe the lives of others, especially due to the rise of social networking services.
In the current of times, In spite of the fact that there is no problem myself
People are feeling that a relative sense of deprivation and a sense of inferiority that Looking at other people's lives.
>>>In this current age, despite having no personal issues, people often experience a sense of deprivation and inferiority when comparing their lives to others.
People overspend in order to relieve that emotions.
>>>CORRECT~!^^
OR>>>
To cope with these emotions, some people resort to overspending.
Buying a good car and good clothes, ect items is not problem If you can afford your situation.
>>>Buying a nice car, quality clothes, and other items isn¡¯t inherently problematic if it fits within your financial means.
But I think overspending to show off my situation is prblematic even though I can't afford it.
>>>However, I believe that overspending to show off or impress others becomes problematic when it¡¯s beyond what you can afford.
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