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How do you feel about animals despite having an allergy?

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I like pets at home very much.
Especially, I like dogs.
When I was young, maybe 5 or 6 years old, I had dogs in my house.
It was in middle school that I knew I was allergic to animals, dust, and peaches.
Since then, I have not raised my pets at home.
Mr. Lee, a dental technician, goes to the countryside every weekend.
There is an old house with a large yard in the countryside, but no one lives there now.
A dog there lives alone.
It was a stray dog, but Mr. Lee is raising it.
The dog's name is Sundae and he is over 10 years old, but sometimes Mr Lee goes in two weeks.
At that time, Mr. Lee's older sister who lives nearby sometimes comes to feed him.
I really enjoy talking to Mr Lee about Sundae.
Dogs are just as good at expressing what they like and dislike as humans.

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Hello David. Your writing is detailed and engaging! I made a few adjustments for smoother phrasing and clarity while keeping your original meaning. Your descriptions make it easy to visualize the story of Sundae and Mr. Lee. Keep up the great work!

~ T. Lia

I like pets at home very much.
>> I really like having pets at home.

Especially, I like dogs.
>> I especially like dogs.

When I was young, maybe 5 or 6 years old, I had dogs in my house.
>> When I was around 5 or 6 years old, I had dogs at home.

It was in middle school that I knew I was allergic to animals, dust, and peaches.
>> I found out I was allergic to animals, dust, and peaches when I was in middle school.

Since then, I have not raised my pets at home.
>> Since then, I have not had pets at home.

Mr. Lee, a dental technician, goes to the countryside every weekend.
>> CORRECT

There is an old house with a large yard in the countryside, but no one lives there now.
>> CORRECT

A dog there lives alone.
>> A dog lives there alone.

It was a stray dog, but Mr. Lee is raising it.
>> It was a stray dog, but Mr. Lee has taken care of it.

The dog's name is Sundae and he is over 10 years old, but sometimes Mr Lee goes in two weeks.
>> The dog's name is Sundae, and he is over 10 years old. However, sometimes Mr. Lee can only visit every two weeks.

At that time, Mr. Lee's older sister who lives nearby sometimes comes to feed him.
>> During those times, Mr. Lee's older sister, who lives nearby, sometimes comes to feed him.

I really enjoy talking to Mr Lee about Sundae.
>> I really enjoy talking to Mr. Lee about Sundae.

Dogs are just as good at expressing what they like and dislike as humans.
>> CORRECT
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