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Talk about a time when you cook with another person or other people.

작성자: 박*호
2025-03-13 809

회원님의 영작문

Actually, I've never cooked with other people.
So I am sorry that I don't have any stories to share with you.
I always cook by myself for myself or my daughters at home.
Even I had never cooked at home until my ex-wife left me eight years ago. at that time in Korea, cooking was exclusively the job of women. the men didn't even do the dishes.
However, the culture related to cooking is also changing in Korea.
These days, most Korean women work during the day like men.
So most Korean men share housework such as cooking, doing the dishes and laundry with their women. but it is still not common for men to cook with other people.
In Korea, during traditional Korean holidays such as Seollal(New Year Day) and Chuseok(Korean Thanksgiving day), all family members usually gather at the parents' house and cook together.
In this case, only women usually participate in cooking.
I think korea too, men will be soon cooking with women during traditional holidays.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Soon Ho^^
Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
It's good to know that your tradition/culture is changing.
I think it's better for both men and women to do the house chores together. 
_T. SHAY^^
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Actually, I've never cooked with other people.
>>Correct
OR: Actually, I haven't tried cooking with others.
So I am sorry that I don't have any stories to share with you.
>>So, I'm sorry that I don't have any stories to share with you.
I always cook by myself for myself or my daughters at home.
>>Correct
OR: I always cook alone for myself and my daughters at home.
Even I had never cooked at home until my ex-wife left me eight years ago. 
>>I had never even cooked at home until my ex-wife left me eight years ago.
OR: Also, I only started cooking at home when my ex-wife left me eight years ago.
at that time in Korea, cooking was exclusively the job of women. 
>>At that time in Korea, cooking was women's responsibility.
the men didn't even do the dishes.
>>The men didn't even do the dishes.
OR: The men didn't even help with other household chores.
However, the culture related to cooking is also changing in Korea.
>>Correct
OR: However, the tradition in relation to cooking is also changing in Korea.
These days, most Korean women work during the day like men.
>>Correct
OR: These days many Korean women have jobs.
So most Korean men share housework such as cooking, doing the dishes and laundry with their women. 
>>So, most Korean men share the housework such as cooking, doing the dishes and laundry with their wives. 
OR: So, most Korean men help with the house chores like cooking and doing the dishes and laundry.
but it is still not common for men to cook with other people.
>>But it is still not common for men to cook with other people.
OR: But it's still not common for me to cook 
In Korea, during traditional Korean holidays such as Seollal(New Year Day) and Chuseok(Korean Thanksgiving day), all family members usually gather at the parents' house and cook together.
>>Correct
OR: In Korea, during traditional holidays like Seollal and Chuseok all family members gather at the parents' house to cook and spend time together.
In this case, only women usually participate in cooking.
>>Correct
OR: During those celebrations, cooking is done by the women only.
I think korea too, men will be soon cooking with women during traditional holidays.
>>I think men in Korea will soon be cooking with women during traditional holidays. 
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