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Which do you prefer, online shopping or in-person shopping? Why?

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Well, I can't choose because each of it has its own strengths and weaknesses.
The great advantage of online shopping is that it is not restricted by location and time. I think it's good to be able to shop anytime, anywhere with a computer and a cell phone and buy what I want.
In-person shopping has a big advantage in that I can see and buy what I want to buy, so I don't have to worry about damaging the quality or buying wrong. I think it's a good idea that online shopping can be scammed or delivered worse than I thought, but in-person shopping is significantly less likely.

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Hello, 

I appreciate your answer. I agree that both their own pros and cons. It's nice that you highlighted those points in your answer. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina 

Well, I can't choose because each of it has its own strengths and weaknesses.
>> Well, I can't choose because each one has its own strengths and weaknesses.
>> Or: It's hard to choose since both options have their own advantages and disadvantages.

The great advantage of online shopping is that it is not restricted by location and time.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Online shopping stands out because you can shop from anywhere, anytime.

I think it's good to be able to shop anytime, anywhere with a computer and a cell phone and buy what I want.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I like that I can shop anytime and anywhere using a computer or smartphone to buy what I need.

In-person shopping has a big advantage in that I can see and buy what I want to buy, so I don't have to worry about damaging the quality or buying wrong. 
>> In-person shopping has the major advantage of allowing me to see and check items before buying, so I don't have to worry about damaged or low quality products or buying the wrong one.

I think it's a good idea that online shopping can be scammed or delivered worse than I thought, but in-person shopping is significantly less likely.
>> I think it's important to consider that online shopping carries a risk of scams or receiving items below expectations, while in-person shopping is much safer in this regard.
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