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Hi, Bo Hyeon!
Your response does a great job of explaining why you admire Mark and highlighting his dedication. To make your writing even stronger, focus on improving sentence structure and grammar. Some sentences are a bit unclear due to word order and verb tense mistakes. For example, instead of "He never show the disappointmenting moment," it should be "He never shows moments of disappointment." "Even though" is stronger and more emphatic than "although." Also, try to use smoother transitions to make your ideas flow better. Keep practicing, and your writing will become even more natural and fluent! ^^ Let's talk more about this later in the class. See you~ 
~ Trixia

HOMEWORK:
I admire one of the k-pop group, called NCT because NCT is representing the K-pop and always trying to show the best moment.
NCT has 4 different groups and especially I respect Mark who NCT member, working in the group in addition he is a leader in a group.
- I admire a K-pop group called NCT because they represent K-pop and always strive to deliver their best performances. NCT has four different subgroups, and I especially respect Mark, who is a member of NCT and also a leader in one of the groups.
He never show the disappointmenting moment, such as didn¡¯t song and dance practice or lost the gratitude of fan.
- He never shows moments of disappointment, whether during song and dance practice or in front of his fans. 
Although even he is working in a both group, NCT127, NCTDREAM, he always makes effert to make best stage and expresses his emotion anout his fan.
- Even though he works in both NCT 127 and NCT Dream, he always puts in effort to create amazing performances and express his emotions to his fans.
When I watched video of his stage at first, I thought that how can person likes own job and enjoy it?
Now I realized it, Enjoying his job and didn¡¯t lazy of his work, the reason he made successful singer and also the reason I admire and love him.
- When I first watched a video of his performance, I wondered how someone could enjoy their job so much. Now, I understand—he truly loves what he does and works hard without laziness. His dedication is the reason he became a successful singer, and it¡¯s also why I admire and love him.

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