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The homework for 19th March.

작성자: 조*호
2025-03-20 1036

회원님의 영작문

Q: Have you ever wanted something that cost an arm and a leg? What was it, and did you end up getting it? Describe your experience and how you felt about it.

A : Yes, I have. I wanted to buy my own house. Although I worked over 6 years, buying a house is something I can't imagine.
As I told you before, average price of home in Seoul is over than $300,000 ~ $400,000.
So, I felt despair. To buy a house, I should work more than 20~30 years. So i can't imagine a marriage and a child.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Eddy,

Your honesty in sharing this experience is really powerful, and I can completely understand why buying a house feels like such a huge challenge. Housing prices, especially in places like Seoul, can feel discouraging, no matter how hard you work. It’s frustrating when something as important as having your own home feels so out of reach, even after years of effort.

But I want to remind you, just because it seems impossible now doesn’t mean it always will be. Many people take years, even decades, to reach big financial goals, and that’s okay. You’re already doing something amazing by thinking about your future and working hard toward stability. And even though homeownership feels tied to big life choices like marriage and children, remember that life doesn’t have just one path. Some people rent happily for years, some find opportunities they never expected, and others achieve their goals little by little.

The most important thing is that you don’t lose hope. You’ve already built six years of experience, and who knows? Maybe an opportunity will come that makes things easier, or maybe you’ll find a different way to create the life you want. Just keep doing your best, stay open to possibilities, and don’t let discouragement take away your dreams. You’re stronger than you think, and I believe in you!

~Teacher Cathy

 

Yes, I have. I wanted to buy my own house.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Yes, I have. I wanted to purchase my own home.

Although I worked over 6 years, buying a house is something I can't imagine.

>>Although I have worked for over six years, buying a house is something I can't even imagine.

As I told you before, average price of home in Seoul is over than $300,000 ~ $400,000.

>>As I mentioned before, the average price of a home in Seoul is over $300,000 to $400,000.

So, I felt despair.

>>CORRECT

OR>>So, I felt a sense of despair.

To buy a house, I should work more than 20~30 years.

>>To afford a house, I would need to work for more than 20 to 30 years.

So i can't imagine a marriage and a child.

>>CORRECT

OR>>So, I can't even imagine getting married or having a child.

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