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How has your pet changed your life?

My life cycle has changed after coming the dog.
I think I have to do more deligent than before. And I can be more generous about other things and be relax when I touch her fur. It might be the effect of my dog.
She is always kind and quietly walks and steps into beside ours. She looks at our eyes gently and wags her tail sofly. So I even wonder if she might be a princess. Thanks to her, I've become gentler to others.
Most of all, It has changed my life cycle to get up early in the morning and go for a walk first every day.
I have sometimes felt bothersome when I tired. I think that It is not bothering but blessing me.
Because It makes me happy every morning to walk around my house with my dog now.
Futhermore, The weather is nice, these days.
It is really spring. So I want to believe that she is an angel who sent to me by god.

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Hello, Stella! It sounds like your pet really holds a special place in your heart. It's amazing how pets can bring so much love and joy into our lives, almost like they're sent to us for a special purpose! ^^Thank you for doing your homework.
~T. Jewel
My life cycle has changed after coming the dog.
>>My life has changed after getting a dog.
I think I have to do more deligent than before.
>>I think I have to be more diligent than before.
And I can be more generous about other things and be relax when I touch her fur.
>>And I can be more generous about other things and relax when I touch her fur.
It might be the effect of my dog.
>>It might be the effect of having my dog.
She is always kind and quietly walks and steps into beside ours.
>>She is always kind and quietly walks and steps beside us.
She looks at our eyes gently and wags her tail sofly.
>>She looks into our eyes gently and wags her tail softly.
So I even wonder if she might be a princess.
>>So, I even wonder if she might be a princess.
Thanks to her, I've become gentler to others.
>>CORRECT
Most of all, It has changed my life cycle to get up early in the morning and go for a walk first every day.
>>Most of all, it has changed my life as I get up early in the morning and go for a walk first every day.
I have sometimes felt bothersome when I tired.
>>I sometimes feel that it is bothersome when I'm tired.
I think that It is not bothering but blessing me.
>>I think that it is not bothering me, but a blessing.
Because It makes me happy every morning to walk around my house with my dog now.
>>Because it makes me happy every morning to walk around my house with my dog now.
Futhermore, The weather is nice, these days.
>>Furthermore, the weather has been nice these days.
It is really spring.
>>CORRECT
OR
>>It really feels like spring.
So I want to believe that she is an angel who sent to me by god.
>>So I want to believe that she is an angel sent to me by God.
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