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How do you feel when you see an old friend after a long time?

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Most things are better new than old ones.
But there are a few things that are better old.
Old wine, old violin (of course, well-managed violin), and old friends.
When you do social activities, you would meet many new people.
The reason why an old friend is good during a conversation is that you don't have to make a story.
You should continue to create a topic of the story so that conversations with new people are not cut off.
For these meetings, I have to pay a lot of attention and I feel a lot of tired after the meeting.
However, even if we take a moment of silence during our conversation with our old friends, our memories of the past will soon come up and we will talk again.
I don't have to force myself to laugh, I don't have to look at the clock to see when it will end, I don't have to wear formal clothes and I don't have to go to a fancy restaurant.
The longer the time we shared together, the longer the comfort I feel.

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Hi David, your writing beautifully expresses the warmth and ease of old friendships! I made some changes for smoother sentence flow and clarity. Keep up the great work. You have a thoughtful and engaging writing style!

~ T. Lia

Most things are better new than old ones.
>> Most things are better when they are new rather than old.

But there are a few things that are better old.
>> However, there are a few things that get better with age.

Old wine, old violin (of course, well-managed violin), and old friends.
>> Aged wine, well-maintained violins, and old friends.

When you do social activities, you would meet many new people.
>> When you engage in social activities, you meet many new people.

The reason why an old friend is good during a conversation is that you don't have to make a story.
>> The reason old friends are great for conversations is that you don¡¯t have to invent a topic.

You should continue to create a topic of the story so that conversations with new people are not cut off.
>> You have to keep coming up with topics to prevent conversations with new people from ending abruptly.

For these meetings, I have to pay a lot of attention and I feel a lot of tired after the meeting.
>> In these meetings, I have to stay very attentive, and I feel quite exhausted afterward.

However, even if we take a moment of silence during our conversation with our old friends, our memories of the past will soon come up and we will talk again.
>> However, even if there¡¯s a moment of silence in a conversation with old friends, memories from the past naturally come up, and we start talking again.

I don't have to force myself to laugh, I don't have to look at the clock to see when it will end, I don't have to wear formal clothes and I don't have to go to a fancy restaurant.
>> I don¡¯t have to force myself to laugh, check the clock to see when it will end, wear formal clothes, or go to a fancy restaurant.

The longer the time we shared together, the longer the comfort I feel.
>> The more time we have shared, the deeper the comfort I feel.

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