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Q : Do you think climate change is making wildfires worse? Why or why not?

A : In my opinion, climate change is causing wilsfires worse.
As earth gets warmer, the humidity of air gets lower.
As a result, extinguishing fires could be harder.
In Korea, we are experiencing a wildfire about a week.
And that fire is still not extinguished.
I hope there will be no more damage.

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Hi Eddy!

Your answer is clear, and you made a good point about how a warmer Earth leads to lower humidity, making wildfires harder to put out. You also connected it to a real event in Korea, which makes your response stronger.

To improve, try adding more details. For example, you can explain why lower humidity makes fires worse or how strong winds can spread them faster. You can also mention how wildfires affect people, nature, and even the air quality in Korea.

You have good ideas, so let¡¯s work on making your explanations even clearer! Keep going!

~Teacher Cathy

 

In my opinion, climate change is causing wilsfires worse.

>>In my opinion, climate change is making wildfires worse.

As earth gets warmer, the humidity of air gets lower.

>>As the Earth gets warmer, the humidity in the air decreases.

As a result, extinguishing fires could be harder.

>>CORRECT

OR>>As a result, extinguishing fires may become more difficult.

In Korea, we are experiencing a wildfire about a week.

>>In Korea, we have been experiencing a wildfire for about a week.

And that fire is still not extinguished.

>>CORRECT

OR>>And that fire is still not fully extinguished.

I hope there will be no more damage.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I hope no further damage occurs.

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