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'First impressions matter' means that the first image that one gives is a main factor that determines how the relationship will begin.
I agree about this phrase because I myself sometimes experience it. When I meet a new person and his or her first impression is nice, I become more open minded to them and get close to each other quickly. Additionally, I tend to tolerate trivial mistakes or faults of him or her. Just having a good first impression makes me to justify and accept the problems more generously assuming it was not intentional and wouldn't happen again.
However, if the first impression of new person is bad, I inclined to make a wall in my mind between him or her. I think most of people would have this kind of instinct because they developed by an experiences to avoid those who might be harmful. Anyway, this solid wall is hard to break that I apt to be more strict and cynical to everything that I undergo with him or her.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Ms. WooIn! You’ve shared some insightful thoughts on how first impressions can shape our relationships with others. I totally agree with your perspective. The way someone presents themselves initially can strongly influence how we perceive and interact with them going forward.
-T. Sonny
'First impressions matter' means that the first image that one gives is a main factor that determines how the relationship will begin.
>>‘First impressions matter’ means that the first image a person presents is a major factor in determining how the relationship will begin.
I agree about this phrase because I myself sometimes experience it. 
>>I agree with this phrase because I have experienced it myself.
When I meet a new person and his or her first impression is nice, I become more open minded to them and get close to each other quickly. 
>>When I meet a new person and their first impression is positive, I become more open-minded and get close to them quickly.
Additionally, I tend to tolerate trivial mistakes or faults of him or her. 
>>Additionally, I tend to tolerate trivial mistakes or faults of theirs.
Just having a good first impression makes me to justify and accept the problems more generously assuming it was not intentional and wouldn't happen again.
>>Just having a good first impression makes me justify and accept problems more generously, assuming they were not intentional and won’t happen again.
However, if the first impression of new person is bad, I inclined to make a wall in my mind between him or her. 
>>However, if the first impression of a new person is bad, I tend to build a wall in my mind between them and me.
I think most of people would have this kind of instinct because they developed by an experiences to avoid those who might be harmful. 
>>I think most people would have this instinct because we’ve developed it through experiences to avoid those who might be harmful.
Anyway, this solid wall is hard to break that I apt to be more strict and cynical to everything that I undergo with him or her.
>>Anyway, this solid wall is hard to break, and I tend to be more strict and cynical about everything I experience with them.

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