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My home is on the 5th floor. I can see an elementary school right outside the window.
In summer, when the window is open, I can hear the kids playing.
It¡¯s a cheerful sound, but hearing it every day can feel like noise and it stresses me out.

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Hi Isabel, your homework was well-structured and clearly expressed your thoughts. You did a great job describing your living situation and how the sounds from the school affect you. I made a small revision in the last sentence to improve the flow and make it sound more natural. Try to be mindful of transitions between ideas to ensure smooth readability. Keep up the great work, and I look forward to reading more of your homework responses.

~ T. Lia

My home is on the 5th floor. 
>> CORRECT

I can see an elementary school right outside the window.
>> CORRECT

In summer, when the window is open, I can hear the kids playing.
>> CORRECT

It¡¯s a cheerful sound, but hearing it every day can feel like noise and it stresses me out.
>> It¡¯s a cheerful sound, but hearing it every day can start to feel like noise, which stresses me out.
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