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Is happiness a choice?

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2025-03-27 775

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In my opinion, it depends on my mind.
We have different standard about the happiness.
Someone can feel happy in their routine life but the others can not feel happy if there is nothing special in their routine life.
According to the psychologists, the most concern of someone who is the happiest is a lunch menu.
We have to try being happy with small and tiny events in our lives for our mental.
If we just want bigger and bigger happy, it can make us sad and disappointed deeply.

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Hi Lydia! 

Thank you for submitting your homework. 
I totally agree with your answer.
Happiness depends on the person. 

Andrea 

In my opinion, it depends on my mind.
>> In my opinion, it depends on the mentality. 

We have different standard about the happiness.
>> We have different happiness standards. 

Someone can feel happy in their routine life but the others can not feel happy if there is nothing special in their routine life.
>> Someone can feel happy with their daily life, but the others can't if there's nothing special happened. 

According to the psychologists, the most concern of someone who is the happiest is a lunch menu.
>> According to psychologists, the most concern of someone who is the happiest is a lunch menu.

We have to try being happy with small and tiny events in our lives for our mental.
>> We have to be optimistic even on small things in our lives for our mental health. 

If we just want bigger and bigger happy, it can make us sad and disappointed deeply.
>> If we really want to be happy, it can bring extreme disappointment and sadness. 
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