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I like people who lived dramatic lives during turbulent times.
Korea went through many changes from the late 1800s to the early 1900s.
At that time, Korea was under Japanese colonial rule, many Koreans fought for independence, and the North and South were divided and fought each other.
I like novels based on people who lived during that time. and I like one of the main characters in those novels.
He was studying in Japan at the time, and was drafted into the Japanese army and sent to the front line against China. Japan was invading China. He escaped from the Japanese army and joined the Chinese army. China was helping Korea gain independence, and he fought against the Japanese army. then Korea gained independence and was divided into South and North.
He joined the North Korean army and participated in the South- North War that broke out in 1950 and died there.
Ironically, he was from South Korea, not North Korea.
His life was a series of hardships, but I long for such a dramatic life.

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Hi, Soon Ho^^
Thank you for sharing.
That was an interesting story.
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I like people who lived dramatic lives during turbulent times.
>>Correct
OR: I 'm drawn to people who endured dramatic experiences in times of turmoil.

Korea went through many changes from the late 1800s to the early 1900s.
>>Correct
OR: Korea experienced significant changes between the late 19th and early 20th century. 

At that time, Korea was under Japanese colonial rule, many Koreans fought for independence, and the North and South were divided and fought each other.
>>At that time, Korea was under the Japanese colonial rule. Many Koreans fought for independence, and later, the North and South were divided and fought each other.
OR: During that period, Korea was under Japanese colonial rule. While many Koreans struggled for independence, the nation was eventually divided into North and South, which later engaged in conflict.
I like novels based on people who lived during that time. 
>>Correct
OR: I enjoy novels about people who lived during that era.

and I like one of the main characters in those novels.
>>And I like one of the main characters in those novels.
He was studying in Japan at the time, and was drafted into the Japanese army and sent to the front line against China.
>>Correct
OR: While studying in Japan, he was conscripted into the Japanese military and deployed to the front line in the war against China.

Japan was invading China. 
>>Correct
OR: Japan was carrying out an invasion of China.

He escaped from the Japanese army and joined the Chinese army. 
>>Correct
OR: He managed to escape and later fought alongside the Chinese army.
China was helping Korea gain independence, and he fought against the Japanese army. 
>>Correct
OR: China was supporting Korea's independence movement, and he fought against the Japanese forces.
then Korea gained independence and was divided into South and North.
>>Then Korea gained independence and was divided into South and North.
He joined the North Korean army and participated in the South- North War that broke out in 1950 and died there.
>>Correct
OR: After joining the North Korean army, he took part in the Korean war in 1950 and was killed in action.

Ironically, he was from South Korea, not North Korea.
>>Correct
OR: It's ironic because he was originally from South Korea. 
His life was a series of hardships, but I long for such a dramatic life.
>>Correct
OR: Though his life was marked by hardships, I long for a life as eventful as his.


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