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I believe most of the people are scared of their future. I think the reason not many people are seemed to be like that is because they acquired the skills to deal with that anxiety through their own experiences.
In my opinion, uncontrollable characteristic of the future makes the anxiety about it. This factor makes people to imagine all kinds of scenarios including unlikely and unrealizable things. Even though there are lots of peaceful and happy scenarios through imaginations, human brain tends to only concentrate on negative and provocative things that it aggravates the fear.
Additionally, people's own imaginations frequently connect to preparing for all circumstances that they have thought of. But, it doesn't help to have conviction about the future but rather creates totally different new scenarios or increase unstability.
Since future will be always uncontrollable, it is critical for people who suffer a lot from the fear of the future to find out a way to deal with it.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Ms. WooIn! It's true that when we try to mentally prepare for every possible outcome, we end up feeling more overwhelmed and uncertain instead of more secure. Overthinking can just lead to more uncertainty rather than clarity or a sense of control.
-T. Sonny
I believe most of the people are scared of their future. 
>>I believe most people are scared of their future.

I think the reason not many people are seemed to be like that is because they acquired the skills to deal with that anxiety through their own experiences.
>>I think the reason not many people seem to feel this way is that they have acquired the skills to deal with that anxiety through their own experiences.
In my opinion, uncontrollable characteristic of the future makes the anxiety about it. 
>>In my opinion, the uncontrollable nature of the future causes anxiety about it.
This factor makes people to imagine all kinds of scenarios including unlikely and unrealizable things. 
>>This factor leads people to imagine all kinds of scenarios, including unlikely and unrealistic ones.
Even though there are lots of peaceful and happy scenarios through imaginations, human brain tends to only concentrate on negative and provocative things that it aggravates the fear.
>>Even though there are many peaceful and happy scenarios in our imaginations, the human brain tends to focus only on negative and provocative thoughts, which aggravates the fear.
Additionally, people's own imaginations frequently connect to preparing for all circumstances that they have thought of. 
>>Additionally, people's imaginations often lead them to prepare for all the circumstances they have thought of.
But, it doesn't help to have conviction about the future but rather creates totally different new scenarios or increase unstability.
>>However, it doesn’t help to have conviction about the future; instead, it creates entirely new scenarios or increases instability.
Since future will be always uncontrollable, it is critical for people who suffer a lot from the fear of the future to find out a way to deal with it.
>>Since the future will always be uncontrollable, it is critical for people who suffer from the fear of the future to find ways to deal with it.
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