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What are the most common problems in electric cars?

작성자: 노*철
2025-03-31 972

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The problem with electric cars is almost from batteries.
The biggest problem is that the drivig mileage is short.
When electric cars first went on sale a few years ago, people could run about 100km after being fully charged.
It has increased a lot now, so you can run about 400km after charging.
If you can make the battery smaller and increase the ability, you will be able to increase the mileage than you are now.
In a few years, I think there could be an electric car that can go 1,000km.
Also, there are many charging stations for electric vehicles, but there is still a lot of shortage.
People who use electric cars have become a habit of charging their cars every day like they always charge their phones.
When traveling a long distance, you must look for the location of the electric vehicle charging station in advance and plan where to charge it.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello David. Your answer offers a concise and perceptive analysis of the difficulties associated with electric vehicles. You did a good job of outlining the primary problems with charging stations and driving range. To enhance sentence flow and clarity, I made a few little grammatical adjustments. You will continue to get better if you keep working on improving your expression and sentence structure. Continue with your great effort! 

~ T. Lia

The problem with electric cars is almost from batteries.
>> The problem with electric cars mainly comes from the batteries.

The biggest problem is that the drivig mileage is short.
>> The biggest problem is that the driving range is short.

When electric cars first went on sale a few years ago, people could run about 100km after being fully charged.
>> When electric cars first went on sale a few years ago, people could drive about 100 km on a full charge.

It has increased a lot now, so you can run about 400km after charging.
>> This has improved significantly, and now you can drive about 400 km on a full charge.

If you can make the battery smaller and increase the ability, you will be able to increase the mileage than you are now.
>> If the battery can be made smaller while increasing its capacity, the mileage could improve beyond what it is now.

In a few years, I think there could be an electric car that can go 1,000km.
>> In a few years, I think there could be an electric car capable of traveling 1,000 km.

Also, there are many charging stations for electric vehicles, but there is still a lot of shortage.
>> Although there are many charging stations for electric vehicles, there is still a significant shortage.

People who use electric cars have become a habit of charging their cars every day like they always charge their phones.
>> People who use electric cars have developed the habit of charging their cars every day, just like they charge their phones.

When traveling a long distance, you must look for the location of the electric vehicle charging station in advance and plan where to charge it.
>> When traveling long distances, you must locate electric vehicle charging stations in advance and plan where to charge.

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