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I easily get sick of songs if I listen to them repeatably. Even though I convince at first that I would be able to listen to a certain song whole my life, it ends with that song being deleted from my playlist.
I think songs that I can listen to all the time with out being tired of are classic ones.
If I arrange songs in a sequence of most frequently listened on my music application, 'Departure' song by Kim Dong-Ryul, a very classic one, appears at the top. I'm not a big fan of him and it doesn't have intriguing melodies like recent music but its unique calmness and voice induces me to listen to it occasionally but for a long time. Its lyrics is about the fresh beginning of a day which is casual unlike most Korean songs which usually talks about their love story in every creative way, that it makes the song more tranquil.
This way classic songs are the ones I can listen to all the time.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Ms. WooIn! You’re right, the calmness and everyday relatability of the song, especially when compared to the often more dramatic love stories in many modern songs, makes it feel like something you can turn to anytime without it feeling overwhelming or repetitive.
-T. Sonny
I easily get sick of songs if I listen to them repeatably. 
>>I easily get sick of songs if I listen to them repeatedly.
Even though I convince at first that I would be able to listen to a certain song whole my life, it ends with that song being deleted from my playlist.
>>Even though I convince myself at first that I could listen to a certain song for the rest of my life, it usually ends up being deleted from my playlist.
I think songs that I can listen to all the time with out being tired of are classic ones.
>>I think the songs I can listen to all the time without getting bored are the classic ones.
If I arrange songs in a sequence of most frequently listened on my music application, 'Departure' song by Kim Dong-Ryul, a very classic one, appears at the top. 
>>If I arrange songs by most frequently played on my music app, 'Departure' by Kim Dong-Ryul, a very classic song, appears at the top.
I'm not a big fan of him and it doesn't have intriguing melodies like recent music but its unique calmness and voice induces me to listen to it occasionally but for a long time. 
>>I'm not a huge fan of him, and it doesn't have the catchy melodies that recent music does, but its unique calmness and his voice make me listen to it occasionally, yet for long periods.
Its lyrics is about the fresh beginning of a day which is casual unlike most Korean songs which usually talks about their love story in every creative way, that it makes the song more tranquil.
>>The lyrics are about the fresh beginning of a day, which feels casual compared to most Korean songs, which usually talk about love stories in creative ways. This makes the song feel more tranquil.
This way classic songs are the ones I can listen to all the time.
>>This is why classic songs are the ones I can listen to all the time.
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