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I think my ability to hide emotion differs from who I am talking to. When I'm with close people it's hard for me to hide my feelings because I less care about my appearance or how counterparts would think about me. When I feel sad or depressed, I try to hide it worrying that it might ruined the mood of the meetings, but it usually doesn't work that well, because my body automatically lowers the tenses and makes me hard to control myself strictly.
On the other hand, with the people who I first met I'm good at hiding emotions. I feel less emotional connections with new people compared to the familiar ones, so it's easier for me to separate my real emotion and facial expressions. I tend to focus on dealing with circumstances in the interaction with strangers that I don't have a distinct variation in my face. Even when stranger did a rude behavior, I get upset but I only focus on how to revenge or ignore naturally without exposing my emotion.

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Hello, Ms. WooIn! Interestingly, you feel more able to control your emotions when you're with strangers, but with close people, it's harder to hide when you're feeling off. Do you think you feel a pressure to hide your emotions with close people, or is it more that you don't want to burden them or shift the mood?
-T. Sonny
I think my ability to hide emotion differs from who I am talking to. 
>>I think my ability to hide emotions differs depending on who I am talking to.
When I'm with close people it's hard for me to hide my feelings because I less care about my appearance or how counterparts would think about me. 
>>When I'm with close people, it's hard for me to hide my feelings because I care less about my appearance or how others might perceive me.
When I feel sad or depressed, I try to hide it worrying that it might ruined the mood of the meetings, but it usually doesn't work that well, because my body automatically lowers the tenses and makes me hard to control myself strictly.
>>When I feel sad or depressed, I try to hide it, worrying that it might ruin the mood of the meeting, but it usually doesn't work well because my body automatically relaxes, making it hard for me to strictly control myself.
On the other hand, with the people who I first met I'm good at hiding emotions. 
>>On the other hand, with people I've just met, I'm good at hiding my emotions.
I feel less emotional connections with new people compared to the familiar ones, so it's easier for me to separate my real emotion and facial expressions. 
>>I feel fewer emotional connections with new people compared to those I'm familiar with, so it's easier for me to separate my real emotions from my facial expressions.
I tend to focus on dealing with circumstances in the interaction with strangers that I don't have a distinct variation in my face.
>>I tend to focus on handling the situation in interactions with strangers, so I don't show much variation in my face.
Even when stranger did a rude behavior, I get upset but I only focus on how to revenge or ignore naturally without exposing my emotion.
>>Even when a stranger behaves rudely, I get upset, but I focus on how to either take revenge or ignore the situation naturally, without exposing my emotions.
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