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I think helping other is not related in their wealth.
We can see people who want to ask for helping like beggers and disabled people.
And there are many charity pots on Christmas days.
I didn't help them every time.
this is my ability of helping people.
If I became rich I will only help them by money donation.
But I know I have to do it right now although I am still not rich.
Helping people is habit.

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Ms. Sunny!
remember, we have our ways how to help other people. It may not be grand, but to the person whom ou extended your help means a lot.
Aki~

I think helping other is not related in their wealth.
>>> I think helping others is not related to their wealth.

We can see people who want to ask for helping like beggers and disabled people.
>>> We can see people who want to ask for help, like beggars and disabled people.

And there are many charity pots on Christmas days.
>>>  And there are many charity pots on Christmas Day.

I didn't help them every time.
>>> I don't usually give my donation.

this is my ability of helping people.
>>> This is my ability to help people.

If I became rich I will only help them by money donation.
>>> If I became rich, I would only help them with a monetary donation.

But I know I have to do it right now although I am still not rich.
>>>  But I know I have to do it right now, although I am still not rich.

Helping people is habit.
>>> Helping people should be a habit.
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