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What advice would you give to someone struggling with controlling their anger?

작성자: 최*연
2025-04-03 165

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In fact, for people who really have trouble controlling their anger, going to the hospital is the best solution.
However, most people included me also have times when they can't control their anger. I also get embarrassed sometimes.
At times like that, I just call my friends or parents etc. I get angry right away, but if I talk about the things that make me angry, I can analyze the reasons why I'm angry, so my anger subsides.
Also, my friends tend to talk to me objectively rather than always taking my side. If I get the right amount of empathy and advice, my anger can subside. It also gives me a chance to think about the position of the person who made me angry.

p.s. At first, I started this call for improving my english speaking skills just. But thanks to you, I really enjoyed talking to you. I'm sorry I couldn't express my feelings to you because it was so early in the morning. And I'm glad you're a great teacher and friend! Have a good day.this is my instagram id,, c._.seo.yeon

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Seo Yeon!~
I'm not the type of person who wants to show rage because I feel bad about it if I do. One thing I don't want to lose is my patience. I always look for other viewpoints. And, like you, after discussing it with someone, I frequently become enlightened about the problem... ~ 
Thank you for the wonderful classes we shared together. I also appreciate your kindness in class. Until we meet again ^___^
Chammy
In fact, for people who really have trouble controlling their anger, going to the hospital is the best solution.
OR
>> I suggest people with anger issues go to a specialist and have a check-up.
However, most people included me also have times when they can't control their anger. 
>> However, most people including me also have times when they can't control their anger. 
OR
>> But I suggest, it is innate to humans to be incontrollable of anger at times.
I also get embarrassed sometimes.
OR
>> I also feel ashamed of it at times.
At times like that, I just call my friends or parents, etc.
OR
>> I often rely on my friends and my parent whenever it happens.
 I get angry right away, but if I talk about the things that make me angry, I can analyze the reasons why I'm angry, so my anger subsides.
OR
>> I get upset easily, but if I discuss the things that irritate me, I can figure out why, and my anger fades.
Also, my friends tend to talk to me objectively rather than always taking my side. 
>> Correct
If I get the right amount of empathy and advice, my anger can subside. 
OR
>> My rage may lessen if I receive the appropriate amount of understanding and counsel.
It also gives me a chance to think about the position of the person who made me angry.
OR
>> It also allows me to consider the viewpoint of the individual who made me mad.
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