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Describe an object you own and particularly like. You should mention:
What it is and what it looks like
What it is made of
What it is for
Why it is special for you

Now, there is only one thing that in my mind about this question.
it is MacBook. it looks square and hard. its maybe made of metal. and its for almost everthing of my present life.
It works smart and effective for my life. so that's why its special.
and I think if I was 8 years old, I would have a lot more things to answer this question.

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Hello, Ye Sol!
Great job! You shared your thoughts clearly, and I like how personal your answer felt. Try to add just a bit more detail about why the MacBook is important to you and polish a few grammar points for a smoother flow. You're on the right track—keep it up!
~ Trixia

CONTENT:
Now, there is only one thing that in my mind about this question.
it is MacBook.
- One thing that comes to my mind for this question is my MacBook.
 it looks square and hard. its maybe made of metal. 
- It¡¯s square, hard, and probably made of metal.
and its for almost everthing of my present life.
- I use it for almost everything in my life right now—studying, working, watching shows, and even shopping.
It works smart and effective for my life. so that's why its special.
- It¡¯s smart and helps me be more productive, which is why it¡¯s so special to me.
and I think if I was 8 years old, I would have a lot more things to answer this question.
- If I were 8 years old, I think I would have had many other answers for this question.
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