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I'm a college student majoring in journalism and marketing. I was about to be a senior this year, but I decided to take a gap year for my internship. So now I'm doing my internship at the AI-tech team in the cosmetic company. I wake up at 7, go to the work by subway by 8:30 and eat breakfast in the cafeteria. Then I have lunch with my colleagues at 12, take a break for an hour, and work again till 6. After the work, I meet my friends or go for a workout. These days I'm willing to achieve self development, so I started english conversation classes every 3 times a week.

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I'm a college student majoring in journalism and marketing. 
>> or: I'm pursuing a college degree with a double major in journalism and marketing.

I was about to be a senior this year, but I decided to take a gap year for my internship. 
>> I could have been a senior student this year, but I opted to take a break and prioritize my internship. 

So now I'm doing my internship at the AI-tech team in the cosmetic company. 
>> So I¡¯m currently interning with the AI-tech team at a cosmetics company.

I wake up at 7, go to the work by subway by 8:30 and eat breakfast in the cafeteria. 
>> Every morning, I wake up at 7, take the subway to work by 8:30, and have breakfast at the cafeteria.

Then I have lunch with my colleagues at 12, take a break for an hour, and work again till 6.
>> At 12, I have lunch with my colleagues, take a one-hour break, and then continue working until 6.

 After the work, I meet my friends or go for a workout. 
>> After work, I either catch up with friends or hit the gym for a workout.

These days I'm willing to achieve self development, so I started english conversation classes every 3 times a week.
>> These days, I'm committed to self-improvement and have started attending English conversation classes three times weekly.
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