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How do you prepare for busy days at work?

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I wish I could always predict a busy days but I can't always predict it.
Physical exhaustion is not a big problem on busy days.
It is important not to lose kindness and sufficient explanation while treating patients.
In order not to lose this, my mind and body must be ready.
I have to keep my mental calm through proper exercise and music activities or reading a book with enough rest.

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Hello David. You did a wonderful job expressing your dedication to your patients and your awareness of self-care. Your writing shows maturity and empathy, especially in emphasizing the importance of kindness during busy times. With just a few minor grammar adjustments, your ideas come through even more clearly. Keep prioritizing your well-being. It¡¯s admirable that you¡¯re working on staying calm and centered both mentally and physically. You're doing great! 

~ T. Lia

I wish I could always predict a busy days but I can't always predict it.
>> I wish I could always predict busy days, but I can¡¯t.

Physical exhaustion is not a big problem on busy days.
>> CORRECT

It is important not to lose kindness and sufficient explanation while treating patients.
>> It is important not to lose kindness or the ability to explain things clearly while treating patients.

In order not to lose this, my mind and body must be ready.
>> CORRECT

I have to keep my mental calm through proper exercise and music activities or reading a book with enough rest.
>> I need to maintain my mental calm through proper exercise, musical activities, or reading a book while getting enough rest.
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