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How do you choose the person you vote during the election ?

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2025-04-08 985

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I am very interested in politics.
In Korea, Koreans over 18 years old have the right to vote.
So I have voted in all elections since I turned 18. and I have never failed to vote.
And I also encourage my two daughters to vote because politics and politicians are very important to my country and voting is a great way to get involved in politics.
I have a general principle that I vote for candidates who have the experience and qualifications to do a good work for my country.
But my most important principle is to vote for progressive candidates.
Korea was a unified country for almost 5,000 years before it was divided in 1945.
So I think the most important thing for Korea is unification, but Korean conservatives, including the former president, are not interested in unification, and only the Progressive Party are pursuing unification.
That is why I support Progressive Party candidates in all elections.
I sincerely hope that a progressive candidate will become president in the June election.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Mr. Park^^
Thank you for sharing.
You really are interested in politics. 
_T. SHAY^^
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I am very interested in politics.
>>Correct
OR: I have a strong interest in politics.
In Korea, Koreans over 18 years old have the right to vote.
>>Correct
OR: Koreans start voting at the age of 18. 
So I have voted in all elections since I turned 18. 
>>Correct
OR: I have never missed any election since I turned 18.
and I have never failed to vote.
>>Correct
OR: And I have always participated in all elections.
And I also encourage my two daughters to vote because politics and politicians are very important to my country and voting is a great way to get involved in politics.
>>Correct
OR: I also encourage my two daughter to vote because politics plays a big part in the country and voting is a great way to participate in politics.
I have a general principle that I vote for candidates who have the experience and qualifications to do a good work for my country.
>>I have a general principle which is to vote for the candidates who have the experience and qualifications to do a good work for my country.
OR: I have a general principle in choosing the political candidate. I usually check their experience and qualifications. 
But my most important principle is to vote for progressive candidates.
>>Correct
OR: But one important principle I have is to vote for the progressive candidates.
Korea was a unified country for almost 5,000 years before it was divided in 1945.
>>Correct
OR: There used to be only one Korea before 1945.
So I think the most important thing for Korea is unification, but Korean conservatives, including the former president, are not interested in unification, and only the Progressive Party are pursuing unification.
>>Correct
OR: I think the most important thing for Korea is the unification, but the conservatives including the former president are against it.
That is why I support Progressive Party candidates in all elections.
>>Correct
OR: That is the main reason why I support the Progressive Party candidate every election.
I sincerely hope that a progressive candidate will become president in the June election.
>>Correct
OR: I really hope that a progressive presidential candidate will be elected in June.
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