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I enjoyed my childhood especially until elementary school. Lots of Korean parents have a fervor for education so that it is common to send their children to several academies. My parents still cared about education but they thought it was not late to start studying hard as I enter middle school. Fortunately, I could enjoy my childhood with more freedom compared to my friends.
When I was in elementary school I always rode bike across the apartment complex and near parks in free time. Wandering with a bike I could see various people and scenery. I sometimes played with my friends who were already in the playground or who just returned from academy. I didn't do large scale things at that time but it was enjoyable and meaningful living leisurely without worries or obligations.

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Hello, Ms. WooIn! That's such a warm and nostalgic memory. I can feel the sense of freedom and small everyday adventures in your words.
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I enjoyed my childhood especially until elementary school. 
>>Correct!
Lots of Korean parents have a fervor for education so that it is common to send their children to several academies. 
>>Many Korean parents have a fervor for education, so it's common to send their children to several academies.
My parents still cared about education but they thought it was not late to start studying hard as I enter middle school. 
>>My parents still cared about education, but they thought it wasn¡¯t too late to start studying hard once I entered middle school.
Fortunately, I could enjoy my childhood with more freedom compared to my friends.
>>Fortunately, I was able to enjoy my childhood with more freedom compared to my friends.
When I was in elementary school I always rode bike across the apartment complex and near parks in free time. 
>>When I was in elementary school, I always rode my bike around the apartment complex and nearby parks during my free time.
Wandering with a bike I could see various people and scenery. 
>>As I wandered on my bike, I encountered various people and scenery.
I sometimes played with my friends who were already in the playground or who just returned from academy. 
>>Sometimes, I played with my friends who were already at the playground or had just returned from their academies.
I didn't do large scale things at that time but it was enjoyable and meaningful living leisurely without worries or obligations.
>>I didn¡¯t do anything large-scale at that time, but it was enjoyable and meaningful to live leisurely, without worries or obligations.
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