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How might this impeachment influence future presidential administrations in South Korea?

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We Korean already had two presidents impeached so far unfortunately. I believe that political heavyweights have learned a lesson from two Presidents' impeachment. It was a long time ago that the President can wield his power as much as he wants. Now the truth that no one can be above the law in Korea demonstrated twice in public even across the world. On the other hand, I as Korean also feel proud our forefathers who sacrificed for democracy in Korea. They didn't spare their lives and properties for better Korea. Without their commitment to democracy on this land, we couldn't have had this democratic country where people can show their sovereignty against dictatorship. Anyway, I hope that we can have the new President who can serve people with humility and patriotism so that our country develop further economically and politically. On top of that, as our ancestors did their best to improve our country so current generation including me needs to follow suit to leave better nation.

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Hi Steve. Like the usual, your response is powerful and full of patriotic emotion. You¡¯ve done a wonderful job expressing pride in Korea¡¯s democratic growth and the sacrifices made by past generations. Also, your writing reflects deep thought and pride in your country¡¯s history. You have a strong sense of responsibility as a citizen, and it shines through clearly. With these small improvements in grammar and structure, your message becomes even more powerful. Keep writing with this heartfelt sincerity. It is very meaningful and inspiring. You¡¯re doing great!

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We Korean already had two presidents impeached so far unfortunately.
>> Unfortunately, we Koreans have already had two presidents impeached.

I believe that political heavyweights have learned a lesson from two Presidents' impeachment.
>> I believe that political heavyweights have learned a lesson from these two impeachments.

It was a long time ago that the President can wield his power as much as he wants.
>> The time when a president could freely wield power is long gone.

Now the truth that no one can be above the law in Korea demonstrated twice in public even across the world.
>> The truth that no one is above the law in Korea has now been proven twice, both publicly and internationally.

On the other hand, I as Korean also feel proud our forefathers who sacrificed for democracy in Korea.
>> As a Korean, I also feel proud of our forefathers who sacrificed for democracy in Korea.

They didn't spare their lives and properties for better Korea.
>> They gave up their lives and property for the hope of a better Korea.

Without their commitment to democracy on this land, we couldn't have had this democratic country where people can show their sovereignty against dictatorship.
>> Without their commitment to democracy, we would not have the country we have today where people can express their sovereignty against dictatorship.

Anyway, I hope that we can have the new President who can serve people with humility and patriotism so that our country develop further economically and politically.
>> I hope that our next president will serve the people with humility and patriotism so that our country can continue to develop both economically and politically.

On top of that, as our ancestors did their best to improve our country so current generation including me needs to follow suit to leave better nation.
>> In addition, just as our ancestors worked hard to improve the country, the current generation, including myself, must do the same to leave behind a better nation.

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