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How confident are you in Korea’s current diplomatic strategies?

작성자: 김*경
2025-04-11 987

회원님의 영작문

I think our country’s diplomatic strategy has been wise and practical between two big countries-America, China- to maximize the benefits of Korean. Korea needs to increase the volume of trade or transactions with other countries because Korea’s economy depends more on exports rather than domestic economy. In some sense, to overcome the limitation of size of economy, we need to bring forward the day of unification which can improve the domestic economy in addition to lots of mineral resources buried under in North Korea. Moreover, we need to change the term of President from a single five-year term to renewable 8-year term in order to have sustainable and consistent policy outcomes, which signaled a good sign to our political and economical allies.
In short, broadly speaking, I am proud of what our people have done so far even though there are still many things to amend or improve.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Steve. You presented a thoughtful and well-rounded perspective on Korea’s diplomatic and economic strategies. Your ideas show both national pride and forward-thinking vision. With just a few grammar and sentence structure adjustments, your message becomes even clearer. It’s impressive how you connect large-scale global diplomacy with domestic hopes for growth and unity. Keep expressing your ideas. Your voice matters.

~ T. Lia

I think our country’s diplomatic strategy has been wise and practical between two big countries-America, China- to maximize the benefits of Korean.
>> I think our country’s diplomatic strategy has been wise and practical in balancing relations between two major powers, the United States and China, to maximize benefits for Koreans.

Korea needs to increase the volume of trade or transactions with other countries because Korea’s economy depends more on exports rather than domestic economy.
>> Korea needs to increase trade with other countries because its economy relies more on exports than on domestic consumption.

In some sense, to overcome the limitation of size of economy, we need to bring forward the day of unification which can improve the domestic economy in addition to lots of mineral resources buried under in North Korea.
>> In some ways, to overcome the limitations of our economy’s size, we need to accelerate unification, which could boost the domestic economy and tap into the many mineral resources buried in North Korea.

Moreover, we need to change the term of President from a single five-year term to renewable 8-year term in order to have sustainable and consistent policy outcomes, which signaled a good sign to our political and economical allies.
>> Moreover, we should consider changing the presidential term from a single five-year term to a renewable eight-year term to allow for more sustainable and consistent policy outcomes, which would send a positive signal to our political and economic allies.

In short, broadly speaking, I am proud of what our people have done so far even though there are still many things to amend or improve.
>> In short, I am broadly proud of what our people have achieved so far, even though there are still many areas that need improvement.


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