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Describe your dream house.

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Most Koreans live in apartments in the city.
Apartments are well-equipped with amenities such as a large parking lot and a fitness center, and is conveniently located near a subway station and shopping center.
Therefore, it is convenient to live in an apartment in the city when working and raising children.
However, living in an apartment is a bit stuffy. So like other Koreans, I dream of living in the countryside.
After I retire, I want to build a house with a large garden in the countryside outside the city. And I also want to plant grass, various trees and flowers in the garden and take care of them.
If possible, I want to raise several dogs and cats so that my grandchildren can play together when they come over later.
Among my retired seniors, there are some who actually moved to the countryside and enjoy country life in a house with a large garden.
I hope my dream comes true in near future.

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Hi, Mr. Park^^
Thank you for sharing.
That seems like a good plan.
_T. SHAY^^
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Most Koreans live in apartments in the city.
>>Correct
OR: Majority of Koreans live in apartments located in urban areas. 

Apartments are well-equipped with amenities such as a large parking lot and a fitness center, and is conveniently located near a subway station and shopping center.
>>Apartments are well-equipped with amenities such as a large parking lot and a fitness center, and are conveniently located near a subway station and shopping center.
Therefore, it is convenient to live in an apartment in the city when working and raising children.
>>Correct
OR: Hence, this makes city apartments a convenient choice for working parents.

However, living in an apartment is a bit stuffy. 
>>Correct
OR: However, living in an apartment can feel a bit cramped or confined.
So like other Koreans, I dream of living in the countryside.
>>Correct
OR: Like many other Koreans, I also dream of a quiet life in the countryside.

After I retire, I want to build a house with a large garden in the countryside outside the city. 
>>Correct
OR: When I retire, I'd like to settle in the countryside and build a home with a large garden.
And I also want to plant grass, various trees and flowers in the garden and take care of them.
>>Correct
OR: I also dream of having a garden filled with greenery and flowers, and tending to it myself.

If possible, I want to raise several dogs and cats so that my grandchildren can play together when they come over later.
>>If possible, I want to raise several dogs and cats so that my future grandchildren can play with them when they visit.
Among my retired seniors, there are some who actually moved to the countryside and enjoy country life in a house with a large garden.
>>Correct
OR: Some of my retired seniors have already moved to the countryside to enjoy life in spacious homes with big gardens.

I hope my dream comes true in near future.
>>I hope my dream comes true in the near future.
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