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Does Korea rely too much on the U.S. for trade and defense?

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Many countries are getting help from the United States on trade and defense issues.
Both the EU and Japan depend on the United States.
We depend on the military power of the United States, and we also have to rely on the United States to trade with the big market of the United States.
But it is possible because the interests of the United States and other countries are compatible.
The United States has controlled other countries with its own great power.
Although Korea's military power has risen to an enormous level, it is not possible to develop missiles that can fly more than 300 kilometers due to U.S. control.
The same goes for nuclear weapons.
If we want to use high-level weapons, the United States tells us not to develop but to buy our own weapons at a high price.
Instead, American soldiers stay in South Korea to prevent North Korea's invasion.
Everything involves this economic logic.
This is because when we help poor countries, there are benefits we can gain from helping them.

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Hi David. Your writing brings up meaningful points about international alliances and the balance of power, especially between South Korea and the United States. You show an awareness of the complex dynamics in global politics and economics. With just a few grammatical refinements, your thoughts become clearer and more persuasive. Keep exploring and expressing your opinions as your perspective reflects strong critical thinking.


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Many countries are getting help from the United States on trade and defense issues.
>> Many countries receive support from the United States in areas such as trade and defense.


Both the EU and Japan depend on the United States.
>> Both the European Union and Japan rely on the United States.


We depend on the military power of the United States, and we also have to rely on the United States to trade with the big market of the United States.
>> We rely on the military power of the United States, and we also depend on them for access to their large market in trade.


But it is possible because the interests of the United States and other countries are compatible.
>> This relationship is possible because the interests of the United States and other countries align.


The United States has controlled other countries with its own great power.
>> The United States has exerted control over other countries through its significant power.


Although Korea's military power has risen to an enormous level, it is not possible to develop missiles that can fly more than 300 kilometers due to U.S. control.
>> Although Korea's military strength has grown significantly, it is still restricted from developing missiles with a range over 300 kilometers due to U.S. regulations.


The same goes for nuclear weapons.
>> The same restriction applies to nuclear weapons.


If we want to use high-level weapons, the United States tells us not to develop but to buy our own weapons at a high price.
>> If we want to use advanced weapons, the United States advises us not to develop them independently but to purchase them at high prices.


Instead, American soldiers stay in South Korea to prevent North Korea's invasion.
>> In return, American soldiers are stationed in South Korea to help deter a potential invasion by North Korea.


Everything involves this economic logic.
>> All of this operates within a framework of economic logic.


This is because when we help poor countries, there are benefits we can gain from helping them.
>> This is similar to how aiding poorer countries often leads to mutual benefits.


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