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Why bother living?

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I am not bother living. But sometimes something bothers me. I think that l have to care my mother and mother in low. But I am not young and my stregth is not enough. This situation bothers me. Furtunatly we have care insurance for the elderly. We can use this insurance at a low price. If i apply for it, a care worker visit my house and help my mother. But this is not all day, four hour a day.
I think that getting old is so sad. But we can't choice. I want to be old healthly and beautifully.

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Hello, Ms. Eva! 
I feel you. Some situations bother us, and we can't do anything about them but face the challenges in life. Your mom and your mother-in-law are lucky to have you.
fighting!
Aki~


I am not bother living. But sometimes something bothers me.
>>> I don't bother living, but sometimes there is something that bothers me

I think that l have to care my mother and mother in low. But I am not young and my stregth is not enough.
>> That is to take care of my mother and my mother-in-law. I am no longer young, and my strength is not enough.
>> I am no longer young, and my strength is not enough to take care of my mother and my mother-in-law.

This situation bothers me.
>> CORRECT!
OR > that thing bothers me

Furtunatly we have care insurance for the elderly. We can use this insurance at a low price.
>>> Fortunately, we have care insurance for the elderly, so we can use this insurance at a low cost.


If i apply for it, a care worker visit my house and help my mother. But this is not all day, four hour a day.
>>> If I apply for a care worker who will visit my house and help my mother, they won't be spending the whole day, just four hours a day.

I think that getting old is so sad. But we can't choice. I want to be old healthly and beautifully.
>>> I think that getting old is so sad. But we can't choose. I want to be old, healthy, and beautiful.

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