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I met some people who married with foreigners.
Some of them got divorced but some people are getting along with foreigners.
If we live together to foreigners we have to admire each of cultures.
But when I heard that their story about marring with foreigners.
Their characters were already different with me since they were children.
They are strong but generous sometimes they were brave and help people although they are not rich.
Especially they don't care other's thinking .
There were experiences they have shared their difficulties together that is the reason their relationship is maintained.

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Hi, Ms Sunny!
Marrying a foreigner can be a challenging and unique experience because you get to know different cultures, food, language, and traditions that may be exactly the opposite of who you are. I would say that people who are married to foreigners are adventurous because they get out of their comfort zone. 
Have a great weekend!
Aki~

I met some people who married with foreigners.
>>> I met some people who  are married to foreigners.

Some of them got divorced but some people are getting along with foreigners.
>>> Some of them got divorced, but some people are getting along with their spouses.

If we live together to foreigners we have to admire each of cultures.
>>> If we live together with foreigners, we have to admire each of cultures.

But when I heard that their story about marring with foreigners.
>>> But when I heard their story about marrying foreigners.

Their characters were already different with me since they were children.
>>> Their characters were already different from mine since they were children.

They are strong but generous sometimes they were brave and help people although they are not rich.
>>> They are strong but generous, sometimes they are brave and help people, although they are not rich.

Especially they don't care other's thinking .
>>> Especially, they don't care what others are thinking.

There were experiences they have shared their difficulties together that is the reason their relationship is maintained.
>>> There were experiences where they shared their difficulties, that is the reason their relationship is maintained.

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