무료 레벨테스트 받고 강사평가 남기면 1,OOO원 쿠폰 즉시 적립!

혹시 사이트에선 찾지 못한 궁금한 점이 있으세요?
남겨주신 이메일을 통해 답변 드리겠습니다.

문의하신 내용이 문자로 발송되오니
연락처를 남겨주세요.
업무시간 월~금 오전9시~오후6시
(점심시간 낮12시~오후1시)

영작교정 게시판

영어 말하기와 쓰기를 동시에 잡는다!

자신 있게 쓸 수 있는 영작문을 위해 파워잉글리쉬 수업을 수강하시는
회원님들께 무료로 제공해드리는 부가 서비스로, 전문 분야를 제외한 자유 주제
또는 강사님이 내주시는 과제를 회원님께서 영어로 작성해주시면,
담당 강사 님께서 ‘문법 오류 교정’ 과 ‘더 나은 영어식 표현’으로 교정해주는
서비스 입니다.

What kinds of jobs are in demand or mostly coveted by young job seekers in Korea?

작성자: 문*현
2025-04-19 1094

회원님의 영작문

In Korea the job demanded by the market and coveted by young job seekers are identical which are tech related jobs. Not limited to software engineering, it spans data and cybersecurity jobs as many companies put effort into being a first mover in machine learning and artificial engineering fields. However, these jobs require a high level of knowledge and experience. Recently, there have been various vocational schools which offer short-term and highly intensive tech related courses. However, compared to the university graduate, those students lack a depth of knowledge and expertise, so they are marginalized in job market. For example, I saw many liberal arts graduates taking these courses to get a job in the small to mid-sized tech companies, but I never saw successful of getting a job. Since most open positions are tech related, many other universities graduate are failing to get a job. This trend is exacerbating the unemployment to 22.1% with those in their 20s.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you for this Aciel. According to an article I read, 2025 shows the highest rate of unemployment among people in their late 20s. This was exacerbated by the COVID pandemic, and then the political turmoil that Korea experienced recently regarding the previous president's impeachment, which had led to instability in the job market. This has caused many foreign investors to hesitate to invest in the Korean market.

In Korea, the jobs demanded by the market and coveted by young job seekers are identical which are tech related jobs. 
>>> correct  
Not limited to software engineering, it spans data and cybersecurity jobs as many companies put effort into being a first mover in machine learning and artificial engineering fields. 
>>> Not limited to software engineering, it spans data and cybersecurity jobs as many companies put effort into being the first mover in machine learning and artificial engineering fields.  
However, these jobs require a high level of knowledge and experience. 
>>>   correct   
Recently, there have been various vocational schools which offer short-term and highly intensive tech related courses. 
>>>  correct   
However, compared to the university graduate, those students lack a depth of knowledge and expertise, so they are marginalized in job market. 
>>>  However, compared to the university graduates, those students lack a depth of knowledge and expertise, so they are marginalized in the job market.  
For example, I saw many liberal arts graduates taking these courses to get a job in the small to mid-sized tech companies, but I never saw successful of getting a job. 
>>>  For example, I saw many liberal arts graduates taking these courses to get a job in the small to mid-sized tech companies, but I never saw anyone (any of them being) successful of getting a job.  
Since most open positions are tech related, many other universities graduate are failing to get a job. 
>>>   Since most open positions are tech related, many other university graduates are failing to get a job. 
This trend is exacerbating the unemployment to 22.1% with those in their 20s.
>>>  correct  
번호 제목 글쓴이 공개 상태 등록일 조회수
142358 How do you keep your hand relaxed while playing? 노*철 완료 2025-02-07 1718
142357 How do you manage your time with a very busy schedule? 김*규 완료 2025-02-07 0
142356 Talk about an interesting culture that you learned or... 박*호 완료 2025-02-07 1738
142355 2/6 Homework 권*빈 완료 2025-02-07 1
142354 If you could meet any famous person, who would it be and why? 박*진 완료 2025-02-07 1549
142353 Does a buffet promote overconsumption? 박*진 완료 2025-02-07 1410
142352 What is the best part of celebrating Lunar New Year? 박*진 완료 2025-02-07 1475
142351 What is the importance of social activities? 박*진 완료 2025-02-07 1546
142350 How significant is keeping these manufacturing plants in Mexico... 문*현 완료 2025-02-07 1411
142349 HOMEWORK 김*진 완료 2025-02-07 0
142348 Homework 오*봄 완료 2025-02-06 2
142347 Waking up early vs waking up late 손*희 완료 2025-02-06 1391
142346 My childhood memories in Suwon 홍*은 완료 2025-02-06 1793
142345 homework 김*연 완료 2025-02-06 1538
142344 Future travel plan 홍*은 완료 2025-02-06 1228
142343 Homework 김*우 완료 2025-02-06 1
142342 What are the other disadvantages of talking on the phone? 진*호 완료 2025-02-06 3
142341 homework 이*숙 완료 2025-02-06 1498
142340 What is work-life balance and why is it important? 송*훈 완료 2025-02-06 1517
142339 2/5 HOMEWORK 김*솔 완료 2025-02-06 2

HOW TO USE IT?

[마이페이지 > 수업 내용 보기 > 학습 캘린더 > 영작교정 버튼 클릭]

수업 횟수만큼 영작교정 게시판이 생성되며,
지난 날짜에도 게시 할 수 있습니다.

주5회 수업 : 월 20회 이용 가능
주3회 수업 : 월 12회 이용 가능
주2회 수업 : 월 08회 이용 가능
01
교정 내용은 최대 1,000byte까지 올릴 수 있습니다.

첨부 파일은 원활한 첨삭을 위한 참고자료로 사용될 뿐,
파일에 대한 첨삭은 불가능 합니다.

업로드 가능한 첨부 파일은 최대 2mb까지이며,
첨부 할 수 있는 파일 형식은 다음과 같습니다.

문서 - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
이미지 - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
전문 분야를 제외한 회원님이 직접 작성한 글만
첨삭이 가능하며,

올려주신 글의 강사님 첨삭은 24시간 이내에
완료 되는 것을 원칙으로 하고 있습니다.
03
하루 게시 가능한 글은 3회까지 이며,
종료된 수업의 영작교정 게시판은
이용이 어려운 점 양해 부탁 드립니다.
04

와이즈에듀케이션아이(주) 사이트명: 파워잉글리쉬 대표이사 전상현
사업자등록번호: 217-81-44736 통신판매신고번호: 2014-서울도봉-0233호
서울본사: 서울시 노원구 한글비석로 245 두타빌 B동 7층 713호
대표번호 1688-8672 개인정보관리 책임자: 안희영 [powerenglish@pweng.net]